Peer Reviews
Dr. Archibald’s ENGL 110
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: Samantha Testa
Paper author’s name: Pasha Ransford
Has the writer written a research paper . . .
[medium]
_X_that joins a conversation (where there is a controversy), that listens to others who have been talking about the topic (old and new docs & sources), and then posits a unique idea(s) in an effort to extend the discussion?
_X_Or, is the paper substantially a report (a "data-dump") of what others have said?
__Or, is it an extended opinion piece that gives no support for the writer's ideas?
__Or, is it merely plagiarized? (this item trumps everything else and results in an "F" in the course.
Comment: There is a unique idea and controversy, but you need to include both the old and new document into this report. The paper is also to much of a report of what others have said you need to include less facts and more opinion.
[opening & introduction]
_X_that contains an opening to the paper that hooks the reader and introduces the writer and his/her purpose for writing the essay? Is there a forecast of what the paper will contain?
Comment: There is definitely a forecast presented in your paper but I feel your opening sentences should be your second sentence. You should write one sentence before that, so it really catches the readers attention.
[use of research question & thesis]
_X_where they employ their research question that then is answered in a thesis and set forward in the paper?
Comment: I feel you definitely have a solid argument and thesis statement presented at the beginning of your introduction paragraph.
[use of sources]
__where the writer introduce his/her sources, summarize, paraphrase, and/or quote them, and then provide a comment for each one that advances their thesis?
You need some in text citations.
[paragraph construction]
__that contains an argument that flows--claim, support, result?
Comment: I feel you really need to present your argument more throughout your paper. Its a good argument just restate it and give your opinion throughout. Maybe if you organize it better it would help, like re arrange paragraphs.
[conclusion]
_X_that contains a conclusion that works to sum up or extend the ideas of the paper?
Comment: Conclusion was very good and wrapped up all of your ideas. The conclusion was very well done.
[works cited and in-text citations]
__that contains well integrated sources, a Works Cited page, and In-text citations conform to the MLA format?
Comment: You need a work cited page and some in text citations.
[sentence-level rhetoric]
_X_where the wriiter has edited the paper carefully for grammatical and punctuation errors?
Comment: I liked that you presented an argument. The argument that there are many ways that insider trading illegally is present within the economy, and that these methods are growing. You also provided some examples and objectives.
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: Samantha Testa
Paper author’s name: Pasha Ransford
Has the writer written a research paper . . .
[medium]
_X_that joins a conversation (where there is a controversy), that listens to others who have been talking about the topic (old and new docs & sources), and then posits a unique idea(s) in an effort to extend the discussion?
_X_Or, is the paper substantially a report (a "data-dump") of what others have said?
__Or, is it an extended opinion piece that gives no support for the writer's ideas?
__Or, is it merely plagiarized? (this item trumps everything else and results in an "F" in the course.
Comment: There is a unique idea and controversy, but you need to include both the old and new document into this report. The paper is also to much of a report of what others have said you need to include less facts and more opinion.
[opening & introduction]
_X_that contains an opening to the paper that hooks the reader and introduces the writer and his/her purpose for writing the essay? Is there a forecast of what the paper will contain?
Comment: There is definitely a forecast presented in your paper but I feel your opening sentences should be your second sentence. You should write one sentence before that, so it really catches the readers attention.
[use of research question & thesis]
_X_where they employ their research question that then is answered in a thesis and set forward in the paper?
Comment: I feel you definitely have a solid argument and thesis statement presented at the beginning of your introduction paragraph.
[use of sources]
__where the writer introduce his/her sources, summarize, paraphrase, and/or quote them, and then provide a comment for each one that advances their thesis?
You need some in text citations.
[paragraph construction]
__that contains an argument that flows--claim, support, result?
Comment: I feel you really need to present your argument more throughout your paper. Its a good argument just restate it and give your opinion throughout. Maybe if you organize it better it would help, like re arrange paragraphs.
[conclusion]
_X_that contains a conclusion that works to sum up or extend the ideas of the paper?
Comment: Conclusion was very good and wrapped up all of your ideas. The conclusion was very well done.
[works cited and in-text citations]
__that contains well integrated sources, a Works Cited page, and In-text citations conform to the MLA format?
Comment: You need a work cited page and some in text citations.
[sentence-level rhetoric]
_X_where the wriiter has edited the paper carefully for grammatical and punctuation errors?
Comment: I liked that you presented an argument. The argument that there are many ways that insider trading illegally is present within the economy, and that these methods are growing. You also provided some examples and objectives.
Dr. Archibald’s ENGL 110
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: Samantha Testa
Paper author’s name: Andrew Wheeler
Has the writer written a research paper . . .
[medium]
_X_that joins a conversation (where there is a controversy), that listens to others who have been talking about the topic (old and new docs & sources), and then posits a unique idea(s) in an effort to extend the discussion?
__Or, is the paper substantially a report (a "data-dump") of what others have said?
__Or, is it an extended opinion piece that gives no support for the writer's ideas?
__Or, is it merely plagiarized? (this item trumps everything else and results in an "F" in the course.
Comment: You definitely presented a good topic and argument, but you need to include the old and new document in to this essay.
[opening & introduction]
_X_that contains an opening to the paper that hooks the reader and introduces the writer and his/her purpose for writing the essay? Is there a forecast of what the paper will contain?
Comment: I liked the opening to your essay. It gave me a feel for exactly what you were going to talk about. You presented a forecast and gave good background information. I would write a sentence before your original first sentence that really hooks the reader. Start it with a question or quote.
[use of research question & thesis]
_X_where they employ their research question that then is answered in a thesis and set forward in the paper?
Comment: You present a clear research question that was answered with several key examples, suggestions, and objections.
[use of sources]
__where the writer introduce his/her sources, summarize, paraphrase, and/or quote them, and then provide a comment for each one that advances their thesis?
You need to provide in text citations.
[paragraph construction]
_X_that contains an argument that flows--claim, support, result?
Comment: Your paper is very organized and your argument flows and is presented through the entire essay. You provide examples to support your claim.
[conclusion]
_X_that contains a conclusion that works to sum up or extend the ideas of the paper?
Comment: Great conclusion, it wraps up everything and provides a result.
[works cited and in-text citations]
__that contains well integrated sources, a Works Cited page, and In-text citations conform to the MLA format?
Comment: You dont have a work cited page or in text citations.
[sentence-level rhetoric]
_X_where the writer has edited the paper carefully for grammatical and punctuation errors?
Comment: There were no grammatical errors found.
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: Samantha Testa
Paper author’s name: Andrew Wheeler
Has the writer written a research paper . . .
[medium]
_X_that joins a conversation (where there is a controversy), that listens to others who have been talking about the topic (old and new docs & sources), and then posits a unique idea(s) in an effort to extend the discussion?
__Or, is the paper substantially a report (a "data-dump") of what others have said?
__Or, is it an extended opinion piece that gives no support for the writer's ideas?
__Or, is it merely plagiarized? (this item trumps everything else and results in an "F" in the course.
Comment: You definitely presented a good topic and argument, but you need to include the old and new document in to this essay.
[opening & introduction]
_X_that contains an opening to the paper that hooks the reader and introduces the writer and his/her purpose for writing the essay? Is there a forecast of what the paper will contain?
Comment: I liked the opening to your essay. It gave me a feel for exactly what you were going to talk about. You presented a forecast and gave good background information. I would write a sentence before your original first sentence that really hooks the reader. Start it with a question or quote.
[use of research question & thesis]
_X_where they employ their research question that then is answered in a thesis and set forward in the paper?
Comment: You present a clear research question that was answered with several key examples, suggestions, and objections.
[use of sources]
__where the writer introduce his/her sources, summarize, paraphrase, and/or quote them, and then provide a comment for each one that advances their thesis?
You need to provide in text citations.
[paragraph construction]
_X_that contains an argument that flows--claim, support, result?
Comment: Your paper is very organized and your argument flows and is presented through the entire essay. You provide examples to support your claim.
[conclusion]
_X_that contains a conclusion that works to sum up or extend the ideas of the paper?
Comment: Great conclusion, it wraps up everything and provides a result.
[works cited and in-text citations]
__that contains well integrated sources, a Works Cited page, and In-text citations conform to the MLA format?
Comment: You dont have a work cited page or in text citations.
[sentence-level rhetoric]
_X_where the writer has edited the paper carefully for grammatical and punctuation errors?
Comment: There were no grammatical errors found.
