Revising the 1Report Assignment

I feel my paper does not need too much more revising. I am going to reread my document and highlight more important facts. I think since I already mention my document and how it affected Joe Jackson, the players, and society that I do not need to add much more. I will change my introduction to summarize more of the document instead of summarizing the scandal. I will let the reader know that the document is a court case. I will also illustrate that the document was a question and answer of Shoeless Joe Jackson's confession, and how that confession changed baseball. Once I fix my introduction I think I will add a little to each paragraph explain the effects the court case or document had on each subtopic. I feel like I explained the importance of Joe Jackson's confession and how this whole scandal changed baseball.

Once I talked with you and had that meeting I feel like I had a slightly better idea of what the assignment consisted of. I like that in Google documents that we can comment back and forth and discuss each individual part of my essay. After our meeting I went on and commented on my essay to help illustrate the point I was trying to get across. I am really going to try and go back and illustrate my main point: The fact that Joe Jackson’s confession and The Black Sox Scandal changed baseball. It changed Joe Jackson’s life in particular; it changed the lives of the seven other players, and finally affected the society around the 1920’s. I am trying to take the concept of this document and the importance of this document and turn it into an essay. I want to provide quotes from the document I want the reader to feel the voices of Joe Jackson, the seven other players, and members of the community during that time period.